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[Trashed] Whitlist Application - rockerkidd - 10-08-2013
In Game Name(IGN): rockerkidd
Your Minecraft USERNAME. rockerkidd
Why do you want to join?
I love RolePlaying just in itself, and realizing it's combined with MC makes me even more geek, so I'm looking for a good RP server, and this one looks pretty amazing.
Do you have any RP'ing experience?
I do, other RP servers, as well as LARPing and D&D tabletop.
Tell us a bit about yourself:
I'm a huge nerd. I love videogames and playing on the computer, but I still have the normal hobbies a teenage would enjoy. I have tons of energy, and initiative to have tons of fun.
Your Character Biography:
Lionna traveled for much of her long life, going from town to town, not to meet anyone or learn anything, but for the fact she could say "I went here" or "I know of that area" to satisfy her smug personality. She was given this life after her parents slowly lost their life from a strange sickness, that she still looks for to this day. When she is between towns or cities, she learns her skills in the environment she finds herself in, making her very keen in the wilderness, but also very smart to learn new skills.
When Lionna was born, she was gifted with a very normal life, she had both parents, and a younger brother, and this carried on into her late teenage years, but at that point, things turned for the worst. Lionna's mother came down with a terrible sickness, making her bedridden and barely able to do anything for herself. her father went off in search for a cure, but never returned, and during his time away, her mother had died of the sickness. Lionna's brother, after loosing his parents, became a very unsociable person, acting like their mother did while she was sick. He never ate, nor sleep, even without Lionna's advice and help. He died soon after of malnourishment. She was left alone, a very broken spirit and soul remained of who Lionna once was. She packed her things and set off to anywhere she could find, with the goal of finding a way to cure the sickness that ended her once wonderful family.
Specify your character's skills:
Agriculture: Farming, Animal Training
Combat: Acrobatics
Knowledge: Science
Misc: Medicine
Music: Singing
Social: Politics
Tradeskills: Tailoring, Cuisine
Wilderness: All
Do your character bring anything to the setting (part from clothes)?
She only brings what she had at home. Some food, tools to survive, clothing, nothing special.
Anything you'd like to add:
I hope i get accepted ^.^
RE: [Pending] Whitlist Application - SentaiPink - 11-08-2013
Hello! My name is Pinkie and I will be helping you with your application. Feel free to ask any questions you have in this thread or PM me.
Backstory
- The backstory needs proofreading. Currently, both paragraphs repeat much of the same information and some of what isn't repeated contradicts the other paragraph. I recommend keeping the story linear as it becomes hard to follow when the same events are covered more than once.
- Elaboration is needed on the characters life outside of the death of her family. Please tell us more about who this person is and try to specify more events in the characters life. Please revise the premise of seeking a deadly illness (or the cure for one). It isn't a very realistic motivation.
- There is no lore relation. Please re-read the lore and include how the events in the lore affected your character. We require the lore relation to ensure your character fits within the setting. http://www.mesalia.net/lore.html
- Please add an additional section for personality.
- The backstory must end with the characters arrival in the forbidden lands.
- I need you to list the full name and age of the character. Please note the age has to be accurate to the lore events, such as the wars.
Skills
You have far too many skills. Since there isn’t an age for your character listed I can’t tell you how many skills are appropriate for them. Generally we see somewhere around 3. We have a guide that should clarify a lot of it, please read the guide, remove most of the skills, explain how and when she learned them in the backstory, summarize what she is capable in the skill list, and attach levels (Beginner, Novice, Competent, Advanced, Expert, Master). http://www.mesalia.net/forum/showthread.php?tid=271
And compare with accepted characters of similar age http://www.mesalia.net/forum/forumdisplay.php?fid=29
Equipment
When we ask what your character is bringing, we're asking for a list. What you have is too vague. Please specify exactly what she's bringing.
That’s everything. I’ll have more for you when you address what I’ve got here. Good luck!
RE: [Pending] Whitlist Application - SentaiPink - 16-08-2013
Trashing according to the three day rule. Feel free to reapply!