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[Trashed] Jaden Cotheo
#1
In Game Name(IGN): JCW313

Why do you want to join?
I wish to get a new roleplaying experience, and thought this would be a great place.

Do you have any RP'ing experience?
Yes, I have played LOTC and Asmalur for 2 years.

Tell us a bit about yourself:
I live in Michigan, and I am an athlete that loves roleplaying. I also like coding bukkit plugins. I am one of the lead developers on Asmalur.

Your Character Biography: Jaden Cotheo

Jaden was born during the Civil war, 23 years ago. His father died soon after his first birthday as he was delivering a message to the rebels to inform them of a surprise attack. His mother was now a widow and had to raise Jaden by herself. They lived in an inn and tavern in the middle realm on the main continent. His mother was a barmaid and she would work in the tavern providing drinks and meals to all the exhausted travelers. She loved Jaden and wanted to make sure he was well fed and had a roof over his head, so she would work her hardest to earn tips and bonuses from the boss just to get by.

When Jaden was old enough, he would watch how things operated around the tavern. He would hang out with the cook for a week, and then the bartender the next. He was pretty good friends with the owner of the inn and tavern, so Jaden would hang out with him and watch how he handled taxes, debt, and other expenses. He would sometimes travel with his mother to the neighbors farm where she would teach Jaden how to pick and plant various herbs and foods. Jaden wanted to be the proud owner of a spectacular inn and tavern one day.

One day, a few months after Jaden's 23 birthday, Jaden kissed his mom goodbye, packed his bags, and told everyone goodbye before leaving the city. He was on his way to another city with all his skills he learned over the years to start his own business. After a few weeks travel, and a few skirmishes, Jaden approached the gates of a fond town. He dropped his sack next to his feet and his eyes were wide open with awe. He was ready to start his dream...

Specify your character's skills:
Cook, butcher, innkeeper, and farmer.

Do your character bring anything to the setting (part from clothes)?
He has a small golden amulet around his neck that his mother gave to him before he set off on his adventure.

Anything you'd like to add:
The lore was a little difficult to understand, (Maybe because I am in the wrong state of mind) so I hope I did alright. I changed my name at the last minute. Sorry for the thread title being different.
#2
Hey, JCW. FireDog here and I will be grading your application. Or at least kick starting the grading. Before we get started, just like to welcome you and say thanks for applying.

We got some things to cover, so let's get started:

1. Detail: I need more details in your back-story. As it is right now, I have no idea what Jarvious is like, how he acts, or what he really did. You need to start from childhood and progress further, showing clear development of the character as he gets older. Be sure to state how he acted and felt during specific situations and why he did specific actions he had. Try to create a person and tell his or her life's story rather than a small and brief back-story. If you're having trouble, see some other approved applications and characters and examine the length and detail the applications have.

2. Personality: I currently have no idea who Jarvious is. Please write a personality section, perhaps two to three paragraphs, describing who he is. This is an important part of your character submission because upon entering the server, this is who your character is and what he is like. How he acts and behaves, and why he does so. Does he avoid violence? How does he feel about the other races? Is he a flirt or does he shy away from women he finds attractive? Does he put on a smile despite feeling sick and sad beneath? Or does he openly express his current emotions? These are the things you should consider among smaller personality traits like favorite foods, colors, seasons, or disliked gifts and types of people.

3. Lore relation: I would like you to add more lore relation to your back-story. As it stands, you have very little and no real reactions to the lore. Be sure to include how your character feels about the events that are taking place in the lore. Also, the current lore relation you have may be incorrect. Currently, the lore needs some updates. I will get back to you on that. For now, be sure to include some crucial points at the end of the lore and your character's reactions to those lore points.

4. Skills: I need you to revise your skill list. Please see the skill guide to do so and be sure to work accordingly to that lore. Revise your skills and I will help you along the way if any problems occur.

For now, this is what I have. I want you to make some large revisions so I'm going to avoid adding too much to the plate. I will continue to work with and help you out if need be. If you have any questions, PM me. Thanks for applying.
#3
Trashed due to inactivity. Please reapply.
  


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