[Snickaaman]

In Game Name (IGN):
[bsnickaaman

How did you find us? (forums. friend, previous member, etc...)[b]
I was looking for a serious role play server on google and found this read the story, and decided it seemed serious.

[b]About You:
I am 16 I live in PA. I have played RP on a server with almost the entire server rped with us. I don't realy know what else to write.

CHARACTER INFORMATION[b]

[b]Name: Wyryn Syvryth
Age: 34
Gender: Male
Appearance:
Wyryn is a miner who grew up under ground he has deathly white skin due to being underground for the majority of his life. He has short dark brown hair, his eyes are a dark brown as well,he has a large beard, and a beer belly, he has upper body strength due to his years, and years in the mines.

Personality:
Wyryn hates to rise above the depths of his mines, he tunnels all day and doesnt get bored. He likes to be alone in his mines but when he does work with someone or lives near or with somebody he gets along just fine, he likes to store his things and not lose any of it because he doesn't surface much to get above ground resources, so he conserves wood supplies and food as much as he can.

Backstory:

Wyryn was a miner so he lived in the "Great Billhurn Mountain" range, he lived in the lesser known city of Gongordia with his parents, Darenth Syrynth and Sarasha, During the war he and his parents would run to the shelter when they heard the horns of battle blowing in the 78th year of the war his father didnt make it in time and he.. died. He and his mother struggled to make enough money to live a in hte 89th year they had to move into the mines he mined everyday to sell things so they can pay for food.

Capabilities:

Wyryn being a miner his whole life he can mine at great rates of speed he doesn't work well with sunlight as it hurts his skin. He can chop down trees fast as well, he isn't very smart not needing intelligence during mining, he cant write and he can only read a small amount, he can carry alot because he carried so much ore.

Items:

He has a pickaxe from his childhood
a couple torches
and he also brought his mothers Gold Nugget[/size][/align]

[Hutchy]

Hello, Snikaaman. I'm Hutchy and I'll be helping you through whitelisting.

• Your backstory needs more relation to the setting's lore, which can be found here. There needs to be some relation to the lore to help us see how and why this character fits into the setting. What impact did the Civil War have on his home, his family? Does his family bear a grudge because of the slavery? Please elaborate on this.

• Your character’s backstory doesn't do a lot to explain personal growth over his life. The backstory needs to show more description of how he was as a child, how he was through adolescence and then into adulthood. It is necessary that we see how the character has changed over the years before arriving in the setting. Please work on this. In addition, we ask that a paragraph describing the character’s personality be added to help us judge it’s realism.

• Your character’s backstory is lacking in explanation of how he grew up. We need to see how his childhood was, what he experienced through adolescence and how he fared as an adult. In short, it needs to be a biography of the character which shows that you know the character, understand the lore, and it must justify all of the character’s personality traits and skills. If you’re having trouble understanding or writing this, the Character Sheets forum is a good place to start.

• Your character’s skills need to be worked on, and it’s current layout makes it difficult to understand the ‘level’ of his skills. I recommend that you read this guide and evaluate the layout of this section.

[Hutchy]

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