23-02-2014, 07:24 PM
(23-02-2014, 05:33 PM)SentaiPink Wrote: Hi my name is Pinkie and I'll be helping you with your application.
- Please provide more detail
You have not given any information on your characters background, history, personality, abilities, or how he's come to have any of these traits and how they've effected him. Please elaborate to provide an in-depth description of your character, his age, where he's from, what he's done, how these things effected him as a person and shaped who he is. All back stories (which is what we are expecting) need to end with the characters setting sail for the forbidden lands, please revise to include a background story.
- Please read the lore http://www.mesalia.net/lore.html
Provide references to it in the life story of your character. We need to know how these events effected your character's life and shaped him. Please revise to provide Lore relation.
- Please provide us a personality section
Your character's personality needs much more elaboration then what you have provided. We need to know who this person is, how they came to be. The back story is intended to help us understand who he is and how this effected his choices and actions in the back story. Please revise.
- Please read the skill guide http://www.mesalia.net/forum/showthread.php?tid=271
We need your skills listed and formatted with levels as stated in the guide and as shown in the examples below. Please elaborate on how and where he learned these skills and what exactly they are.
- Please review this accepted character application
This is a good example of what we're looking for. http://www.mesalia.net/forum/showthread.php?tid=362
That's all I've got for now. When you've updated the application, bump the thread and we'll start round two!
Its good to have constructive criticism every once and awhile, I'll get right on the edits!