[Hutchy]

Hello, Heikmar. I'm Hutchy, and I'll be helping you through Whitelisting.

• ‘My character is assassin’ Unfortunately, we make a point of asking that new players not play this kind of character, for several reasons including; Assassin characters will have a very specific skill set that will not likely apply well within the setting and make it boring to play.

• Your backstory needs more relation to the setting's lore, which can be found here. There needs to be some relation to the lore to help us see how and why this character fits into the setting. What impact did the Civil War have on his home, his family? Does his family bear a grudge because of the slavery? Please elaborate on this.

• Your character’s backstory doesn't do a lot to explain personal growth over his life. The backstory needs to show more description of how he was as a child, how he was through adolescence and then into adulthood. It is necessary that we see how the character has changed over the years before arriving in the setting. Please work on this.

• Your character’s skills need to be worked on, and it’s current layout makes it difficult to understand the ‘level’ of her skills. I recommend that you read this guide and evaluate the layout of this section.

• As the last point, the character's backstory must end with their arrival in the Forbidden Lands, where the RP setting is located. Please add this to the backstory in your next edit.

That's all for now. Bump this thread when you have finished the necessary edits and we can continue.