[Hutchy]

Alright, Tetris. Next round.

• It takes several months by boat to reach the Forbidden Lands from the Mainland. A good way to flesh out that part of the story would be to describe how she and her family faired finding a boat, then the following trip.
  Additionally, some description of the reaction to her descision to leave would help this.

• On the skills, some are not necessary. Namely performance, horse riding and juggling. Performance is just agiven with her skills of lute playing and singing. Horse Riding isn't necessary unless the character has some unusual technique for doing it or doing something technical from the saddle. Finally, juggling is a skill, no doubt, but not one that needs to be listed in this manner.
  Last point here is outdoor survival. It hasn't been mentioned or justified in the backstory, which is necessary to help judge if it's realistic or not.

That's all for now. Bump the thread when you're done and we can continue.