15-10-2017, 07:29 PM
Hello again, it's time for round 2.
Lore: Catholicism does not exist in Mesalia. Please see our official religion lore. https://www.mesalia.net/forum/showthread.php?tid=220
Furthermore, the crusades as known in history seemed to be implied in the story, but those are non-existent in our lore. This ties into what you said to be “biblical verses”. While religious teaching exists, they likely wouldn’t be in the form of a Catholic bible.
Conflicts with Setting: Our current RP setting is Nightveil. It is a small town with its own history. Your backstory conflicts too much with the history of the town. There aren’t “Well known private schools” around. I’d suggest having James born and raised in a different town. (Most people make one up on the Mainland) Especially since you mention James’s parents dying in the Mesalian Civil Wars. Nightveil is located on the Forbidden Lands, so it seems odd that his parents would leave their son for fighting a conflict roughly three months away by boat. Just to be clear, your character has to end at Nightveil, which is located on the Forbidden Lands, a separate continent from the Mainlands.
Skills: Your backstory mentions teachings of combat strategies but your skill list doesn’t follow suit. Various war tactics and implementation of strategies is a tedious study that takes practice and knowledge to execute well. This is also true of leadership, which is mentioned.
Thanks again for working on the application. Please address the above issues and we can continue!
Lore: Catholicism does not exist in Mesalia. Please see our official religion lore. https://www.mesalia.net/forum/showthread.php?tid=220
Furthermore, the crusades as known in history seemed to be implied in the story, but those are non-existent in our lore. This ties into what you said to be “biblical verses”. While religious teaching exists, they likely wouldn’t be in the form of a Catholic bible.
Conflicts with Setting: Our current RP setting is Nightveil. It is a small town with its own history. Your backstory conflicts too much with the history of the town. There aren’t “Well known private schools” around. I’d suggest having James born and raised in a different town. (Most people make one up on the Mainland) Especially since you mention James’s parents dying in the Mesalian Civil Wars. Nightveil is located on the Forbidden Lands, so it seems odd that his parents would leave their son for fighting a conflict roughly three months away by boat. Just to be clear, your character has to end at Nightveil, which is located on the Forbidden Lands, a separate continent from the Mainlands.
Skills: Your backstory mentions teachings of combat strategies but your skill list doesn’t follow suit. Various war tactics and implementation of strategies is a tedious study that takes practice and knowledge to execute well. This is also true of leadership, which is mentioned.
Thanks again for working on the application. Please address the above issues and we can continue!