07-04-2013, 09:51 AM
Alright, well done, I'm going to go ahead and say you are Accepted. However, there's one nitpick you may consider fixing in your spare time;
1. You speak of Gonal getting the stories of many of the people in his town and incorporating it into his paintings. You then speak of his dad being secretive about his life story due to the War of Veld and Slavery. This is understandable, however, it doesn't make sense that Gonal wouldn't know about these two events anyway as they were probably huge part of the lives of many people he spoke to realisticly; as they were Middle-Realm wide events.
But, like I said, you've fixed sufficiently what I saw needing edits, so you're in. I will whitelist you in a moment, and feel free to hop on at any time and get tested by an available GM like me! Keep in mind though, you will want to read over these rules as you will be tested on them as well as quality of Roleplay.
Good luck!
1. You speak of Gonal getting the stories of many of the people in his town and incorporating it into his paintings. You then speak of his dad being secretive about his life story due to the War of Veld and Slavery. This is understandable, however, it doesn't make sense that Gonal wouldn't know about these two events anyway as they were probably huge part of the lives of many people he spoke to realisticly; as they were Middle-Realm wide events.
But, like I said, you've fixed sufficiently what I saw needing edits, so you're in. I will whitelist you in a moment, and feel free to hop on at any time and get tested by an available GM like me! Keep in mind though, you will want to read over these rules as you will be tested on them as well as quality of Roleplay.
Good luck!