18-04-2013, 05:38 AM
My apologies for the late reply. I have not had time to log in this week.
Alright, your application is improving. However I have recently spotted some things in the more detailed section involving personality.
1. Could you perhaps add more depth to the character by adding negative traits? Things that are bad about your character? You currently have none and that is a bit troublesome. Things like: "Clumsy, Lies for no reason, etc." Everyone has negative traits and I would like you to give your character some.
Be sure make have the traits make sense, "Shy" could work for one although you should give Nichole a few.
2. Back to the skills section, I would like to ask you to use this format:
Novice/Beginner -- Apprentice/Basic -- Competent/Average/Moderate/Proficient--Advanced/Adept/Skilled --Expert--Master
You have some of those listed, although I would prefer a more specific scale like I have listed.
Novice should be about 1-2 years of working on a skill.
Apprentice should be about 3-4 years of working on a skill.
Average/Moderate should be about 5-9 years of working on a skill.
Adept should be about 10-14 years of working on a skill.
Expert should be about 15 years plus.
Master should be about 20 years plus when strait up only working on that skill and devotion to all their studies on that skill.
Note that these years only apply to how much one character may study this skill. If the character has more skills, then they would not reach Master after 20 years.
To help you out a little, you character is 17.
Helping out with the farm since the age of six.
At the age of 12 she was able to do her own work.
With the gap in the skill due to mining, I would say Nichole should be high level apprentice or moderate in farming tasks.
Mining feels about right being at novice.
That's about it! Thanks!
Alright, your application is improving. However I have recently spotted some things in the more detailed section involving personality.
1. Could you perhaps add more depth to the character by adding negative traits? Things that are bad about your character? You currently have none and that is a bit troublesome. Things like: "Clumsy, Lies for no reason, etc." Everyone has negative traits and I would like you to give your character some.
Be sure make have the traits make sense, "Shy" could work for one although you should give Nichole a few.
2. Back to the skills section, I would like to ask you to use this format:
Novice/Beginner -- Apprentice/Basic -- Competent/Average/Moderate/Proficient--Advanced/Adept/Skilled --Expert--Master
You have some of those listed, although I would prefer a more specific scale like I have listed.
Novice should be about 1-2 years of working on a skill.
Apprentice should be about 3-4 years of working on a skill.
Average/Moderate should be about 5-9 years of working on a skill.
Adept should be about 10-14 years of working on a skill.
Expert should be about 15 years plus.
Master should be about 20 years plus when strait up only working on that skill and devotion to all their studies on that skill.
Note that these years only apply to how much one character may study this skill. If the character has more skills, then they would not reach Master after 20 years.
To help you out a little, you character is 17.
Helping out with the farm since the age of six.
At the age of 12 she was able to do her own work.
With the gap in the skill due to mining, I would say Nichole should be high level apprentice or moderate in farming tasks.
Mining feels about right being at novice.
That's about it! Thanks!