[Ranger2415]

[Hutchy]

Hello, Ranger. I'm Hutchy and I'll be helping you through whitelisting.

• There are a few things you seem to have missed while using the application format. You must include your character's age and fill in the skills section of the application before the application can be graded properly

• Your backstory needs more relation to the setting's lore, which can be found here. There needs to be some relation to the lore to help us see how and why this to the setting. What impact did the Civil War have on hishome, his family? Does his family bear a grudge because of the slavery? Please elaborate on this.

• Your character’s backstory doesn't do a lot to explain personal growth over his life. The backstory needs to show more description of how he was as a child, how he was through adolescence and then into adulthood. It is necessary that we see how the character has changed over the years before arriving in the setting. Please work on this.
  Additionally, you must include a personality section. This lets us know that you know the character. When you add further detail to the backstory, it can help you accomplish this.

That's all for now. Bump this thread when you have finished the necessary edits and we can continue.

[Hutchy]

Trashed due to inactivity. Feel free to re-apply.