[MC_HoRiZoNTaL]

In Game Name (IGN): MC_HoRiZoNTaL

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About You: i'm just a guy working part time and likes to play Minecraft

CHARACTER INFORMATION

Name: Erhardt Werner

Age: 26

Gender: male

Appearance: a sturdy built man

Personality: caring

Backstory: he was a normal person whom father was a guard. at a young age of 6 he was taught how to use a sword and ever since was training but then his father was killed in the war and his mother and sister were killed by thieves. so when he was alone and nothing to do he ran to the forbidden lands starting his life there

Capabilities:

Swordsmen - skilled

Items: he always carries his fathers old iron sword for memories of his past life

Additional Comments:

[FireDog]

Hey Horiztonal! Thanks for applying to Mesalia! I'll be looking at your application and helping you along. Here are some things I'm going to have to ask of you to adjust for the character app.

1. Details. I'm going to ask for more detail and information on your character. Right now, everything is rather brief. I suggest taking a look at some other characters to see how we prefer to write our characters in Mesalia. These two are great examples. Note the details on personality, appearance, and backstory.

https://www.mesalia.net/forum/showthread.php?tid=1072

https://www.mesalia.net/forum/showthread.php?tid=1018

2. Lore relations. As it stands, your backstory has no relation to the lore. Please read the lore here: https://www.mesalia.net/forum/lore.php
And adjust. For major events that occurred/are occurring during your character's life, be sure to say how said events impacted him. If they did not directly do anything in his life, be sure to state why.

3. Skills. As it stands, your character has only one skill and the specifics of it aren't clear. I suggest looking at the skill guide here: https://www.mesalia.net/forum/showthread.php?tid=271
and the the characters I linked earlier to see how skills work in Mesalia.

Thank you again for applying! I'm looking forward to seeing your edits.

[Hutchy]

Trashed due to inactivity. Feel free to reapply.