Right, hey Fire, here to grade your app.
Basically I just want to see more meat on your backstory.
Childhood: Throw at me some more details, mainly on how Roy felt about whatever he went through during his childhood. For example, how he felt when he first learnt to brew, what he thought of his brothers, or of the Martillo, or being a Martillo, or having lived in Provensia, etc.
There are lots of angles you can take to add more color to his childhood, but I'll leave that up to you. I want to see enough of Roy's character to see what kind of a kid he was.
Travels: You mention that Roy travelled about, I'd like to see some more bits and bobs about his trips. Assuming he only stayed within a certain distance of Provensia, tell me what happened during those trips. That's it for now. You don't seem to have much issues with your skills, or relations lorewise, so should be alright in the next edit. Probably.
Basically I just want to see more meat on your backstory.
Childhood: Throw at me some more details, mainly on how Roy felt about whatever he went through during his childhood. For example, how he felt when he first learnt to brew, what he thought of his brothers, or of the Martillo, or being a Martillo, or having lived in Provensia, etc.
There are lots of angles you can take to add more color to his childhood, but I'll leave that up to you. I want to see enough of Roy's character to see what kind of a kid he was.
Travels: You mention that Roy travelled about, I'd like to see some more bits and bobs about his trips. Assuming he only stayed within a certain distance of Provensia, tell me what happened during those trips.