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[Trashed] Laurannex's Application
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In Game Name(IGN):
laurannex (No capitals- just that.)

Why do you want to join?
Well, I have had a lot of experience in roleplaying (as I state in the next question) and I figured it was time to expand my horizon a bit.

Do you have any RP'ing experience?
(NOTE: I went a bit all-out with this part... sorry about that :3)
I have quite a bit of experience, actually.
As a kid, I used to play World of Warcraft (back when I didn’t understand all of what was actually about) and I absolutely adored the variety of medieval outfits; my favorite style of clothing. My family all had their own toons, so I would take some of their gold and buy tons of dresses and stuff. As I grew up, I started to realize that I really enjoyed acting like someone else, and, as silly as I am, tried to RP on a PVP realm. That was of course back when I hadn’t known there even WAS reals specifically for RP, so I was so excited when I found that out. My dad payed to transfer my favorite toon over and I started to RP. After a month or so, I was getting really frustrated that no one was taking RP seriously. My friend had shown me a Yogscast video of Survival Island, and I fell in love with minecraft. I bought it and started getting really, really good at it; Albeit, it took a long while. I started basing my builds off of medieval buildings, tried making towns, but I just never got really interested in it. Finally, my buddy from WoW told me about a server called “Crafthammer”. I was soooo excited- I never thought that anyone would roleplay on minecraft! I immediately made an application, and got accepted. I joined that server around the end of the first map, and by the fourth map, I was a moderator (Well, I became a mod because of perms issues, but the other mods/admins accepted me as a regular mod. ^u^)
Sadly, after the fourth map, Crafthammer’s fourth map came to an end. I found out maybe a month later that it was most likely not coming back, so I set off to join another server. I found a server that was named, I think, Beetlejuice. It was pretty alright, but the map was way too big, the mobs were set on hard, the days were shorter than normal, it was underpopulated, and their were rarely any events. I once more set off to a new server. Many of my friends that I had met on Crafthammer (who have actually become some of the greatest people I know) told me about Lord Of The Craft. I had already applied in the past, but had gotten really frustrated when I wasn’t accepted my first time. After I found that most of them were on the server, I forced myself into reapplying and I was accepted! I was accepted to Lord Of The Craft on the 22nd of May this year, and have held a stable character for a bit less than four months. It feels like it has been much longer than that, seeing how much the character has developed.

Tell us a bit about yourself:
I enjoy a lot of things... I’m just going to go find some common questions and answer them.

1. What was your favorite food when you were a child?
My favorite food as a child and still is would be chicken noodle soup. Mmm, that stuff is amazing.

2. What’s the #1 most played song on your iPod?
Well, I don’t have an iPod anymore, but on Spotify my number one song is Its Gonna Be Me by N Sync c:

3. What is one of your favorite quotes?
My favorite quote of all time is “Friendship is born at that moment when one person says to another: ‘What! You too? I thought I was the only one.” -C.S. Lewis.

4. What are your favorite indoor activities?
Indoor activity is definitely doing hair, playing instruments (singing, playing the tuba, piano, cello, clarinet, etc.) or, of course, gaming.

5. What chore do you absolutely hate doing?
I hate cleaning out the catbox. I’m pretty sure that reason speaks for itself.

6.What is your favorite form of exercise?
I love to go swimming. I just got my pool fixed over the summer, so its all ready for me to do laps and stuff.

7. What is your favorite time of day/day of the week/month of the year?
My favorite month of the year is January. Its my birth months, and where I live, things are normally really cold- which I also love c:!

8. What’s your least favorite mode of transportation?
I hate travelling by car. Cars get on my nerves- I am extremely superstitious, so I always think we are going to end up in a wreck.

9. What is your favorite body part?
My favorite part of the body is the nose. Its the first thing I notice in a person. I love when someone's nose is really tiny and petite and it matches the rest of their face. C:

10. What sound do you love?
I love the sound of a cat purring. Its so adorable and cute and perfect!
Your Character Biography:

Name: Lavinia Warren
Age: 21
Race: Mesalian
Occupation: Bard
Appearance/Description: Lavinia has soft grey eyes, which greatly contravene with her bright, red hair. Her father always said her eyes and hair were in a constant war of iridescence, fighting for a persons recognition. Her physique is lissome, seeing as she was given the straining task of keeping a sharp eye on her younger brother Liam. Her skin seems soft to the touch, the coloration fairly light. Her cheeks are normally very rosy, matching suitably with her hair. She wears a simple peasants dress- one of which used to belong to her mother.
Skin: http://www.minecraftskins.com/skin/26440...a-and-eva/

Backstory: Lavinia sailed over to the Forbidden Lands when she was only a year old. Although she was unable to comprehend what was happening in her surroundings at the time, she gradually became able to understand it as she grew. For some time, she had an indubitable interest in the history of her people. As time went on, her enthusiasm for learning about the past dwindled down to nothing. Music become a significant part of her life. On her 13th birthday, her father bought her a lute that she fell in love with. It was with her all of the time (with the exception of sleeping, bathing, etc.) Her parents also exposed that Lavinia’s mother Theresa was pregnant. Although, Lavinia was very upset at this, as she had quite enjoyed being an only child.
Nine months later, Lavinia’s baby brother Liam was born. He was quite a handful- he consistently kept the household busy, seemed to always be crying, and was overall a pain in the butt. Lavinia’s dislike for her baby brother did not cease- but as they grew together, they formed the mutual brother-sister bond.
As Lavinia matured, her musical skills followed right behind. She revealed that she had a very enchanting singing voice. The townspeople described it as graceful and delicate, yet energetic and meaningful.
Times began to grow hard in her family. Lavinia’s mother had passed on a few months after Lavinia turned 19. Her father was barely getting enough income, and Liam was growing ill. After giving it thought, Lavinia chose to go work as the local tavern’s bard. The pay was mostly from tips, but it did help her family land back on their feet.
Two years went by and Lavinia decided it was time to set off on her own. She had forged many bonds with people who came to the tavern, but knew it was time to start branching off to a new place. Her closest friend, Jinora, was once again trying to convince her to stay.
“Come on, Lavinia,” Jinora pleaded. “You already have a job here. And you’ll have to leave your family and friends behind.”
Lavinia frowned. “Jinora, I know... I don’t want to, but if I plan on getting started with my life-”
Jinora cut her off, shouting, “So you don’t think you have a life started here?!”
“No... I didn’t mean that. I just want to move on with what I have now. I can’t benefit from being here any longer.” The sadness in Jinora’s face was so visible, it practically smacked Lavinia in the face. They both stayed quiet for what seemed like centuries before Lavinia spoke up again. “Listen...” She murmured. “I know, it really sucks... But I can’t stay here anymore, and nothing will change that. I sure will miss you, Jinora... but this is for the best.”
Tears started to stream down Jinora’s face as she laughed sadly. “You’re making it sound like you’re breaking up with me.” Lavinia wrapped her arms around Jinora, now crying herself.
“I’ll miss you, Jinora.”
“I’ll miss you, too, Lavinia.”

Specify your character's skills:

Fighting:
Very nimble when it comes to running and climbing.
Is somewhat skilled with throwing daggers, but otherwise is unskilled.

Personality:Charismatic

Hobbies:
Enjoys playing her lute, and is very good at it.
Loves to sing, and, once more, is very good at it.
Learns to play instruments and adjust her voice quickly.

Do your character bring anything to the setting (part from clothes)?
Lavinia only brings a picture Jinora drew for her and a lute.

Anything you'd like to add:
I don’t really have anything to add. xP
#2
Hi, welcome to Mesalia. I'm Michelle and I'll be reviewing your app.
Basically, the issues in this application stem from a lack of detail, but I like your enthusiasm and it seems you have the bare bones laid out; it’s just a matter of developing those ideas further.
  • 1. Overall, your character’s backstory requires more detail. Most aspects of Lavinia’s life, such as her relationship with Jinora, her interest in music and history, her changing opinions on her brother, etc. read as very sudden and random due to a lack of elaboration and build up. Please revise/elaborate; consider how the character felt at particular moments of her life, as well as the other feedback points since they all relate back to this one.
    2. Your character’s personality also requires more detail. To make this easier to understand, I’ve broken this into two parts:
    • a) Your character’s personality should be the main focus of their backstory; it should do this by telling us how Lavinia has become who she is. How has her upbringing affected her? How have the events in her life shaped her? What has made her change in the past? Please revise/elaborate with questions such as these in mind.
      b) Please also include a prose description of your character’s personality, similar to how you’ve described your character’s appearance; lists aren’t very detailed on their own. Consider things like the character’s faults, ambitions and values. What’s she like in different situations?
    3. Your character’s skills require more detail; while you do make Lavinia’s skills clear, you don’t explain how she learnt them, or where/who she learnt them from. Please revise and elaborate on this in your character’s backstory. You also need to specify just how skilled your characters are; you already sort of did this, but it’s not very clear. Here’s a nifty guide that explains how people usually describe their character’s skill levels here; keep in mind that your character shouldn’t be too skilled for her age. Please consult the guide, then revise.
    4. Your character’s backstory requires more lore relation. While I understand your character lived in the Forbidden Lands for pretty much her entire life, there is still more potential for relevant lore relation. For example, what are Lavinia’s opinions on Xitians and Lucins? Why did her parents move to the Forbidden Lands? If she’s heard of them, what does she think of the civil wars? Knowing what she knows, would she ever want to see the mainland? Please consider questions such as these, and elaborate/revise.

I may have stayed up into late/early hours to finish this post, so sorry if anything isn’t clear. Do feel free to ask questions if that’s the case. That’s all for now. Good luck.
P.S.: Korra and Last Airbender FTW.
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Trashing due to inactivity. =(
Feel free to reapply.
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