[Doc]

Name: Markett Alevi
Age: 23
Gender: Male
Appearance: Tall, fair skin, short, messy, black hair, green eyes. He wears a pair grease smeared goggles, and all of his clothes and some of his hair is also covered in grease. He wears a pair of plain clothes, black tunic to try to cover the grease spots, and a pair of brown pants. His fingers are long and and nimble, but he doesn’t have much muscle tone.
Personality: Generally friendly to everybody, he doesn’t have much to fight about. He’s the the person everybody calls to fix their things. and he doesn’t really care what he has to fix, when he has to fix it. He priorities the people he cares about above all else, even if the request is strange, making him quite gullible. But, when in Dangerous situations, he can think on his feet and try to fix the situation, though sometimes he can mess it up. Badly.
Backstory: When he was young he was always taught to to be curious. His father was a blacksmith who always thought of new, inventive ways to create silver works. Though never strong enough to become a blacksmith, he did have a knacker for locksmithing, as he found out by attempting the skill with the town locksmith. And he decided to learn for a good portion of his life to it until he decided to leave town to find a town who needed his skills.
Capabilities:
Adept Engineer: Is quite well endowed with setting up and creating locks.
Novice Tradeskills: Spent about a year and a half working alongside his blacksmith father.
Items: Lockmaking set.

[Hutchy]

Hello, Doc. I'm Hutchy and I'll be helping you through whitelisting.

• Your backstory needs more relation to the setting's lore, which can be found here. There needs to be some relation to the lore to help us see how and why this character fits into the setting. What impact did the Civil War have on his home, his family? Does his family bear a grudge because of the slavery? Please elaborate on this.

• Your character’s backstory doesn't do a lot to explain personal growth over his life. The backstory needs to show more description of how he was as a child, how he was through adolescence and then into adulthood. It is necessary that we see how the character has changed over the years before arriving in the setting. Please work on this. In addition, we ask that a paragraph describing the character’s personality be added to help us judge it’s realism.

• Your character’s backstory is lacking in explanation of how he grew up. We need to see how his childhood was, what he experienced through adolescence and how he fared as an adult. In short, it needs to be a biography of the character which shows that you know the character, understand the lore, and it must justify all of the character’s personality traits and skills. If you’re having trouble understanding or writing this, the Character Sheets forum is a good place to start.

• You may wish to look back at the whitelisting format here. It gives you an idea of what we look for in applications for our server, as well as answering frequently asked questions.

That's all for now. Bump this thread when you have finished the necessary edits and we can continue.

[Hutchy]

Trashed due to inactivity. Feel free to re-apply.