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[Trashed] Apostolo Thanos's Application
#1
In Game Name (IGN):
classikrocknsa


How did you find us? (Forums, friend, previous member, etc…)
I found the community through minecraftforum whilst searching for a serious roleplay server, Zark had made a post where there was a link regarding the server.


About You:
I am 17 years old, I still go to school in 10th grade. I live on my school, but I am home on most weekends and holidays. Unless there is an event with the school. I really like to challenge myself such as doing sports. I am highly interested in music and i play the guitar which I has been for 3-4 years now.
CHARACTER INFORMATION

Name:
Apostolo Thanos


Age:
In his thirties


Gender:  
Male


Appearance:
Brown hair, big eyebros, grey/green eyes, Brown tanned skin, a normal looking noose, small dimples and a special mouth, very hairy and a big beard, wears an old torn shirt, black gloves, and brown woolen trousers, brown leather boots.

Personality:
Sarcastic form of humour, great apetite, try to keep away from trouble.

Backstory:
Rowan has always been interested in nature and animals and spent much time as a kid in the wild. He had his own dog, a shepherd, called Scrappy. His dog was his best friend and once saved his life when he nearly drowned in the stream behind their house. He always fed the wild cats and wild birds. Some of the birds even sat on his hand if he was very quiet. His mother liked it but his father thought it was a waste of time. When he grew a little older he helped his father, who worked as a blacksmith. That way he grew stronger and was not afraid of the horses that had their shoes renewed. It was hard work and he could see that his father grew old before his time. So he decided at a very young age that he would not follow in his father’s footsteps.
When he was 15 he left home to seek new adventures mostly because his parents died in a fire. It was nobody’s fault. The house was hit by lightning in a thunderstorm and as he was sleeping in a small hut in a tree he did not get hurt. He could not save his parents though and sometimes it still haunts him. First he worked in a mill not far from his former home. But he did not like all the dust and really hated to see the burned out building ever so often. He was searching something without really knowing what it was. He moved away to work as a rail road worker. There he moved about a lot all over the country and met all sorts of people. When he was 19 he joined a circus and kept on moving about.He stayed with the circus for 8 years and tried many different jobs there. When he left, he moved up into the mountains to see if he could find some gold. He never found any but got a few good friends. With his many friends he now and again heard rumours of a country, Mesalia, beyond the sea. At first he did not pay any attention as so many stories were told on his way about in the country. But as he heard these stories again and again he began to wonder if this fine land really existed. He heard you could make a good life there. Even get rich if you worked hard. The jobs he had had so far would never make him wealthy and he would have to travel about all his life. When he could only get to this land he could settle down and begin to make a better life for himself. He gave up his travels and began to work at the harbor waiting for the right ship to take him to [font]the lands of Mesalia.[/font]
 
Capabilities:
Brute fighting, mining, talking and having a sense of sympathetic feelings towards others.
Items:
A few gold pieces, a mining pick, some wood, and a map of Mesalia that he had been rewarded in his old country for helping a friend.
Additional Comments:
He has a sore toe and explodes if anyone touches his toe.
#2
[dir=ltr]Hello, Clazzy. I'm Hutchy and I'll be helping you through whitelisting.

Your backstory needs more relation to the setting’s lore, which can be found here. There needs to be some relation to the lore to help us see how and why this character fits into the setting. What impact did the Civil War have on his home, his family? Does his family bear a grudge because of the slavery? Please elaborate on this.

Your character’s backstory doesn't do a lot to explain personal growth over his life. The backstory needs to show more description of how he was as a child, how he was through adolescence and then into adulthood. It is necessary that we see how the character has changed over the years before arriving in the setting. Please work on this. In addition, we ask that a paragraph describing the character’s personality be added to help us judge it’s realism. If you’re having trouble writing this, the Character Sheets forum is a good place to start.

Your character’s skills need to be worked on, and it’s current layout makes it difficult to understand the ‘level’ of his skills. I recommend that you read this guide and evaluate the layout of this section.

A couple things need to change and be removed, those things being:
There are no railroads in Mesalia. 
There is also nowhere in the setting actually called Mesalia, the two land masses I think you mean to be referring to are the Mainland and the Forbidden Lands. The Forbidden Lands are where your character should end up at the end of their backstory and are almost entirely unmapped.
[/dir][dir=ltr] [/dir]That's all for now. Bump this thread when you have finished the necessary edits and we can continue.
#3
This application has been closed due to inactivity. Feel free to reapply.
  


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