12-05-2019, 04:17 PM
Hello, Jbolt. I'm Hutchy and I'll be helping you through whitelisting.
I have two major points that need addressing.
Alright, first things first, I need to see more relation to the servers lore, which can be found here. Being 21, he'll have been born shortly before the Civil War ended. Make sure to make mention of these and following events in your character's backstory. Speaking of backstory, it needs to end with either your character arriving in or travelling to where the setting takes place. For ease of reference, it's a town called Nightveil.
Your backstory indicates that a second person is brought along with Jordan. I'm afraid this won't be acceptable, you can only bring one character per application, and new players can only have one character for their first few weeks.
That's all I'll give you for now, it's quite a large ask. Post again in this thread when you've made your edits and we'll continue.
I have two major points that need addressing.
Alright, first things first, I need to see more relation to the servers lore, which can be found here. Being 21, he'll have been born shortly before the Civil War ended. Make sure to make mention of these and following events in your character's backstory. Speaking of backstory, it needs to end with either your character arriving in or travelling to where the setting takes place. For ease of reference, it's a town called Nightveil.
Your backstory indicates that a second person is brought along with Jordan. I'm afraid this won't be acceptable, you can only bring one character per application, and new players can only have one character for their first few weeks.
That's all I'll give you for now, it's quite a large ask. Post again in this thread when you've made your edits and we'll continue.